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Đề tài: [Anh] Sửa lỗi giúp ḿnh

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    Question [Anh] Sửa lỗi giúp ḿnh

    1. Today, the computer is used everywhere and becomes indispensable thing in human life.

    2. It helps people perform different tasks quickly and easily.

    3. It also saves time, effort and reduces the overall cost.

    4.Computer helps people keep the document, managing financial transactions.

    5.It helps people entertained by listening to music, watching a film, playing games in computer.

    6.It helps people can have access to all sort of information on the internet.

    7. The computer is being used in every field of life such as medical, business, industry and much more.

    8.computer has some disadvantages.

    9.using computer reduces the need of people and increases unemployment in society.

    10.using computer also wastage of time and energy by many people use computer without positive purpose for a long time.

    11.It is problem data security.

    12. The data stored on a computer can be accessed by unauthorized person through network.

    13.it has created serious problems for the data security.

    14. It is affect to health.

    15.The improper and prolonged use of computer can results in injuries or disorders of hands, eyes,...

    16. Although there are some disadvantage, computer still is a invention necessary for people.

    Câu nào sai th́ sửa hộ ḿnh với nhé
    Sửa lần cuối bởi khatrichtinhthan : 13-02-2016 lúc 10:42 AM

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    Mặc định

    1.indispensable -> an indispensable
    4. managing -> manage
    5. entertained -> entertaine
    6. can -> bỏ

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    Trích Nguyên văn bởi khatrichtinhthan Xem bài viết
    1. Today, the computer is used everywhere and becomes indispensable thing in human life.

    2. It helps people perform different tasks quickly and easily.

    3. It also saves time, effort and reduces the overall cost.

    4.Computer helps people keep the document, managing financial transactions.

    5.It helps people entertained by listening to music, watching a film, playing games in computer.

    6.It helps people can have access to all sort of information on the internet.

    7. The computer is being used in every field of life such as medical, business, industry and much more.

    8.computer has some disadvantages.

    9.using computer reduces the need of people and increases unemployment in society.

    10.using computer also wastage of time and energy by many people use computer without positive purpose for a long time.

    11.It is problem data security.

    12. The data stored on a computer can be accessed by unauthorized person through network.

    13.it has created serious problems for the data security.

    14. It is affect to health.

    15.The improper and prolonged use of computer can results in injuries or disorders of hands, eyes,...

    16. Although there are some disadvantage, computer still is a invention necessary for people.

    Câu nào sai th́ sửa hộ ḿnh với nhé
    1. Today, the computer is used everywhere and becomes indispensable thing in human life.

    This sentence needs to be revised. Why is the computer used everywhere? Is it because it has become indispensable in every day life? What is the "cause and effect" in this statement? The way the sentence is currently written, the cause and the effect are reversed.

    The phrase "in human life" is rarely used. It is more common to say, "in everyday life".

    Here's my proposed revision => Having become indispensable in everyday life, the computer is used everywhere.

    2. It helps people perform different tasks quickly and easily. => OK

    3. It also saves time, effort and reduces the overall cost. => This sentence is rather ambiguous if it stands alone. What "overall cost" does the sentence refer to? The phrase "the overall cost" needs to be put in a specific context. Moreover, the word "effort" should be stated in the plural => "efforts" when talking in general.

    My suggestion => If employed properly, it (the computer) could save time, efforts and reduce the overall operating costs of a company.

    4.Computer helps people keep the document, managing financial transactions. => ambiguous sentence => What document does the sentence refer to? Please note also that after "help", the verb should remain in the infinitive form => "manage" instead of "managing"

    => Computer helps people keep track of their paperwork and manage their financial transactions.

    5.It helps people entertained by listening to music, watching a film, playing games in computer. => There are several errors in syntax here. =>

    It helps people entertain themselves by listening to music, watching a film and playing games either in their computers or on line


    6.It helps people can have access to all sort of information on the internet. => it helps people access all kinds of information on the Internet.

    7. The computer is being used in every field of life such as medical, business, industry and much more => You mixed up nouns with adjectives.

    => The computer is currently used in every field of human endeavors such as medicine, business, industry, engineering and many more.

    8.computer has some disadvantages => There are some disadvantages associated with (using) the computer

    9.using computer reduces the need of people and increases unemployment in society => a rather debatable statement.=> Increased adoption of computer use in industry may lead to less reliance on human labor and increase unemployment.

    10.using computer also wastage of time and energy by many people use computer without positive purpose for a long time.=> very poorly written and ambiguous statement.

    => Abuse of computer usage could lead to loss of productivity for many employees (or people).

    11.It is problem data security. => what do you mean? Are you trying to say => there are also problems with protection of data security by computers?

    12. The data stored on a computer can be accessed by unauthorized person through network. => The data stored on a computer could be accessed by unauthorized people hacking into a network.

    13.it has created serious problems for the data security. => ambiguous and inaccurate statement => computers themselves do not create problems for data security. Rather, the operating systems used by the computers may have flaws that could be exploited by hackers, leading to potential breach of data security.

    14. It is affect to health. => poor syntax => The computer could have an adverse effect on health.

    15.The improper and prolonged use of computer can results in injuries or disorders of hands, eyes,...=> Improper and prolonged use of computer could cause carpal syndrome and eye disorders etc.

    16. Although there are some disadvantage, computer still is a invention necessary for people => many errors in article usage, subject verb agreements etc. => Despite some disadvantages, the computer remains a useful invention for many people.

    Sửa lần cuối bởi LHX : 16-02-2016 lúc 01:35 PM

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    ngườitôithuơng (17-02-2016)

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