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Đề tài: Các bạn giúp ḿnh chữa bài IELTS task 2 này nhé!! (Topic: Women and men)

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    Mặc định Các bạn giúp ḿnh chữa bài IELTS task 2 này nhé!! (Topic: Women and men)

    Ḿnh đang tự luyện viết IELTS theo quyển Collins Writing for IELTS. Bạn nào tốt bụng có thể giúp ḿnh chữa bài exam practice, unit 1 dưới đây không.

    Ḿnh cảm ơn nhiều.

    WRITING TASK 2


    You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

    Write about the following topic:

    Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    Write at lease 250 words.

    Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weakness. Women are often considered to be compliant, gentle and vulnerable and to be suitable for careers such as nurse, pre-school and primary school teacher, secretary and receptionist. On the other hand, men are normally described as more aggressive, authoritative, competitive and stronger, thus suitable for jobs like police, lawyer, engineer and politician. However, I do not think that excluding males or females from certain professions is a good idea.

    Firstly, the characteristics I mentioned above are what people often consider about men and women, not their absolute features. There are many, though not majority, women who are strong, competitive and aggressive. One of good example is Margret Thatcher, who is called Iron Lady. Besides, there are many men who succeed in the areas of female such as fashion designers and makeup artists. The differences in strengths and weaknesses of each person, not each gender, make this world colorful.

    Some researches found that the existence of opposite gender at living environment make people become healthier. Because people tend to spend majority of their time in workplace, the existence of other gender makes them happier and more efficient in doing their responsibilities. In addition, many people find their other halves at workplace. The diversity of genders at workplace creates a good chance for the romance relationship and the development of the society.

    In conclusion, I believe that although men and women are generally different in strengths and weaknesses, we should let them choose their career by their preference. Excluding a gender from typical jobs is not a good example of a developed society.
    Sửa lần cuối bởi mattroilanh_tt : 10-08-2013 lúc 07:07 PM


  2. Thành viên sau cám ơn mattroilanh_tt v́ bài viết hữu ích

    glorydays123 (03-09-2013)

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    Mặc định

    ḿnh chỉnh vài lỗi chính tả theo những ǵ ḿnh biết, bạn tham khảo nhé

    Trích Nguyên văn bởi mattroilanh_tt Xem bài viết
    Ḿnh đang tự luyện viết IELTS theo quyển Collins Writing for IELTS. Bạn nào tốt bụng có thể giúp ḿnh chữa bài exam practice, unit 1 dưới đây không.

    Ḿnh cảm ơn nhiều.

    WRITING TASK 2


    You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

    Write about the following topic:

    Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    Write at lease 250 words.

    Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Women are often considered to be compliant, gentle and vulnerable and to be suitable for careers such as nurse, pre-school and primary school teacher, secretary and receptionist. On the other hand, men are normally described as more aggressive, authoritative, competitive and stronger, thus suitable for jobs like police, lawyer, engineer and politician. However, I do not think that excluding males or females from certain professions is a good idea.

    Firstly, the characteristics I mentioned above are what people often consider about men and women, not their absolute features. There are many, though not majority, women who are strong, competitive and aggressive. A good example is Margret Thatcher, who is called Iron Lady. Besides, there are a lot of men who succeed in the areas of female such as fashion designers and makeup artists (v́ ở đây bạn dùng từ "area" nên ḿnh nghĩ nên dùng danh từ nghề nghiệp chứ không chỉ người như "fashion design" và "makeup art"). The differences in strengths and weaknesses of each person, not each gender, make this world colorful.

    Some researchers found that the existence of opposite genders at living environment make people become healthier. Because people tend to spend majority of their time in workplace, the existence of other gender makes them happier and more efficiently in doing their responsibilities. In addition, many people find their other halves at workplace. The diversity of genders at workplace creates a good chance for the romance relationship and the development of the society.

    In conclusion, I believe that although men and women are generally different in strengths and weaknesses, we should let them choose their career by their preference. Excluding a gender from typical jobs is not a good example of a developed society.

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    mattroilanh_tt (11-08-2013)

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    Mặc định

    cảm ơn câu hỏi của chủ topic nhé, ḿnh rất thích chủ đề này

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    Mặc định

    Trích Nguyên văn bởi mattroilanh_tt Xem bài viết
    Ḿnh đang tự luyện viết IELTS theo quyển Collins Writing for IELTS. Bạn nào tốt bụng có thể giúp ḿnh chữa bài exam practice, unit 1 dưới đây không.

    Ḿnh cảm ơn nhiều.

    WRITING TASK 2


    You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

    Write about the following topic:

    Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    Write at lease 250 words.

    Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses.(You should paraphrase this sentence, do not directly quote it from the given topic- There have always been differences in the types of work men and women have done). Women are often considered to be compliant, gentle and vulnerable and to be suitable for careers such as nurse, pre-school and primary school teacher, secretary and receptionist. On the other hand, men are normally described as more aggressive, authoritative, competitive and stronger, thus suitable for jobs like police, lawyer, engineer and politician. However, I do not think that excluding males or females from certain professions is a good idea. (The introduction is rather long,make it briefer & more concise)

    Firstly, the characteristics I mentioned above are what people often consider about men and women, not their absolute features. There are many, though not majority, women who are strong, competitive and aggressive. A good example is Margret Thatcher, who is called Iron Lady?? (what is special about her? be more specific). Besides, there are many men who succeed in the areas of female such as fashion design and make-up. The differences in strengths and weaknesses of each person, not each gender, make this world colorful.

    Some researchers found that the existence of opposite gender at living environment makes people become healthier. Because people tend to spend the majority of their time in workplace, the existence of other gender makes them happier and more efficiently in performing their responsibilities. In addition, many people find their other halves at workplace. The diversity of genders at workplace creates a good chance for romantic relationships and the development of the society(over - deduced)

    In conclusion, I believe that although men and women are generally different in strengths and weaknesses (paraphrase), we should let them choose their career by their preference. Excluding a gender from typical jobs is not a good example of a developed society.
    Bài viết của bạn phát triển ư tương đối logic, tuy nhiên bạn nên chú ư viết pần introduction ngắn gọn hơn, pần này nhằm làm nổi bật thesis statement chứ ko nên đi sâu quá vào details. Bạn để ư thêm một số lỗi về ngữ páp và diễn đạt nhé.
    Sửa lần cuối bởi Ngoc_Chili : 12-08-2013 lúc 09:13 AM

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    mattroilanh_tt (12-08-2013)

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    Trích Nguyên văn bởi Ngoc_Chili Xem bài viết
    Bài viết của bạn phát triển ư tương đối logic, tuy nhiên bạn nên chú ư viết pần introduction ngắn gọn hơn, pần này nhằm làm nổi bật thesis statement chứ ko nên đi sâu quá vào details. Bạn để ư thêm một số lỗi về ngữ páp và diễn đạt nhé.
    Cảm ơn bạn. Bạn gợi ư cho ḿnh cách sửa chỗ này được không?

    I believe that although men and women are generally different in strengths and weaknesses (paraphrase)


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    Trích Nguyên văn bởi mattroilanh_tt Xem bài viết
    Cảm ơn bạn. Bạn gợi ư cho ḿnh cách sửa chỗ này được không?

    I believe that although men and women are generally different in strengths and weaknesses (paraphrase)
    Paraphrase: I believe that although each gender has their own strengths and weaknesses/ men and women have their own strengths and weaknesses.
    Bạn chỉ cần biến đổi đi một chút để tránh lặp lại, chứng tỏ ḿnh ko lấy câu có sẵn trong đề bài mà ḿnh đă think and write



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    mattroilanh_tt (12-08-2013)

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