Các bạn giúp ḿnh chữa bài IELTS task 2 này nhé!! (Topic: Women and men)
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WRITING TASK 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at lease 250 words.
Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weakness. Women are often considered to be compliant, gentle and vulnerable and to be suitable for careers such as nurse, pre-school and primary school teacher, secretary and receptionist. On the other hand, men are normally described as more aggressive, authoritative, competitive and stronger, thus suitable for jobs like police, lawyer, engineer and politician. However, I do not think that excluding males or females from certain professions is a good idea.
Firstly, the characteristics I mentioned above are what people often consider about men and women, not their absolute features. There are many, though not majority, women who are strong, competitive and aggressive. One of good example is Margret Thatcher, who is called Iron Lady. Besides, there are many men who succeed in the areas of female such as fashion designers and makeup artists. The differences in strengths and weaknesses of each person, not each gender, make this world colorful.
Some researches found that the existence of opposite gender at living environment make people become healthier. Because people tend to spend majority of their time in workplace, the existence of other gender makes them happier and more efficient in doing their responsibilities. In addition, many people find their other halves at workplace. The diversity of genders at workplace creates a good chance for the romance relationship and the development of the society.
In conclusion, I believe that although men and women are generally different in strengths and weaknesses, we should let them choose their career by their preference. Excluding a gender from typical jobs is not a good example of a developed society.
Sửa lần cuối bởi mattroilanh_tt : 10-08-2013 lúc 07:07 PM
cảm ơn câu hỏi của chủ topic nhé, ḿnh rất thích chủ đề này
Cảm ơn bạn. Bạn gợi ư cho ḿnh cách sửa chỗ này được không?
Nguyên văn bởi Ngoc_Chili
I believe that although men and women are generally different in strengths and weaknesses (paraphrase)
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