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essay: what should people do to stay healthy. check it for me pleaase.
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Question: a healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets lots of exercise and avoids stress.
What should people do to stay healthy?
Human kind needs health to live and work; there are many approaches which people can apply to obtain a good health.
First of all, health and happiness are usually parallel, in order to possess a strong health, people need a happy life. Family is a major factor to make a happy life possible, after a busy and tired day of working, a husband comes back home with many concerns about his work; family is the place that makes him revive. All members of the family gather having a meal together, talk to each other and share what they have experienced in the day. When acquiring a happy family like that people would obtain a happy life. As a witness, many researches have demonstrated that a lonely and meaningless life might lead a person to illness.
Secondly, having a happy life is not enough to possess a good health; people need a healthful life style. For instance doing exercise or playing sports are positive ways such as: jogging, swimming, Yoga and so on. Likewise, sleeping is also important, an adult has to sleep at least 6 hours a day in order to have enough energy to work. If a person slept 3 or 4 hours a day lasting for some days, he might be exhausted and could not work productively. In addition, a proper diet also contributes to possessing a good health. Avoiding drinking too much alcohol liquid such as: wine, bear, not using stimulates such as: drugs or cigarette.
To sum up, there are many factors that contribute to having a good health. What I want to say is that each person should discover their strong point and weak point in order to infer a suitable approach for themselves.
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Please check it for me. Thanks in advance
Question: a healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets lots of exercise and avoids stress.
What should people do to stay healthy?
Human kind needs People need health to live and work. There are many approaches which people can apply to that people could opt for obtain a good health having good health. (what are these?)
First of all, health and happiness are usually parallel (with each other), in order to possess a strong be healthy, people also need a happy life. Family is a major factor to make a happy life possible (Spiritual life can be formed by happy family). For instance, after a busy and tired day of working, a husband wearily comes back home with many concerns about his work; tons of worries, and family is the only place that makes him revive for him to release. All the members of the family gather having a to have meal together, talk to each other and share what they have experienced in the day. When acquiring a happy family like that people would obtain a happy life (Obviously, a happy family is another substantial reason for people living a full life). As a witness, many researches demonstrated Research has shown that a lonely and meaningless life might lead a person to may result in illness.
Secondly, having a happy life is not enough to possess a does not mean to have good health; people need a healthful life style, too. For instance, doing exercises or playing sports are positive ways such as: jogging, swimming, yoga and so on will be able to make them healthy. Likewise, sleeping is also important; an adults have to sleep at least 6 hours a day in order to have enough energy (do not use "enough energy", how much energy do they need to be called "enough"? => be healthy) to work. If a person usually slept sleep for 3 or 4 hours a day lasting for some days, he or she might be exhausted and could not work productively. In addition, a proper diet also contributes to possessing a is essential for those who want to have good health. People should avoiding drinking too much alcoholic liquid such as: wine, bear, not using stimulates such as: and using drugs or cigarette, too.
To sum up, there are many factors that contribute to having a good health reasons for ones to be healthy. What I want to say is that each person People should discover their strong points and weak points in order to infer choose a suitable approach for themselves.
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Có ǵ ko hiểu bạn cứ hỏi nhé :")

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