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vantrong_qhs
05-09-2009, 11:07 AM
Last summer, I went to Vung Tau with my brother to visitedmy grandmother. I had a wonderful vacation there. But I met a complex evert when I went to beach. I could not swim. I was curiais about sea water. I wanted to swim. Swimming in the sea was very glad. I was very interesting. But I was unlucky, I didn’t take notice of high tide. The high tide took me away from seaside. I tried to strived . I thought I would be drowned at sea, Everyone shouted. Luckily a man helped me escape from the death. I was safe . That day was very awful

live to love
05-09-2009, 12:14 PM
Last summer, I went to Vung Tau with my brother to visitedmy grandmother. I had a wonderful vacation there. But I met a complex evert when I went to beach. I could not swim. I was curiais about sea water. I wanted to swim. Swimming in the sea was very glad. I was very interesting. But I was unlucky, I didn’t take notice of high tide. The high tide took me away from seaside. I tried to strived . I thought I would be drowned at sea, Everyone shouted. Luckily a man helped me escape from the death. I was safe . That day was very awful
Mùa hè năm ngoái, tôi đến Vũng Tàu cũng anh trai để thăm bà ngoại. Tôi đă có một ḱ nghỉ tuyệt với ở đó. Nhưng tôi đă gặp một sự rắc rối khi tôi đi biển. Tôi ko thể bơi. Tôi rất ṭ ṃ về nước biện Tôi muốn bơi. Bơi dưới biển thật vui. Tôi rất thích thú. Nhưng tôi đă ko may mắn, tôi ko chú ư đến việc thủy triều dâng. Thủy triều dâng cuốn tôi ra xa bờ. Tôi đă cố gắng chống cự. Tôi đă nghĩ rằng tôi sè bị chết đuối dười biển. Mọi người gọi. May mắn thay một người đàn ông đă cứu tôi thoát khỏi cái chết. Tôi đă dc an toàn. Đó là một ngày khủng khiếp.

super_bongbong
05-09-2009, 10:50 PM
Last summer, I went to Vung Tau with my brother to visited my grandmother. I had a wonderful vacation there. But However, I met a complex evert when I went to beach. I could not swim. I was curiais curious about the sea's water. I wanted to swim. Swimming in the sea was very glad. It was very interesting. But However, I was unlucky, I didn’t take notice of high tide. The high tide took me away from seaside. I tried to strived??? . I thought I would be drowned at sea, Everyone shouted. Luckily a man helped me escape from the death. I was safe . That day was very awful

thật t́nh... tớ đang buồn ngủ nên k biết có soát đúng k nữa :-<
câu văn của cậu hơi lủng củng th́ phải :-<

miss_kool
29-04-2010, 05:24 PM
Last summer, I went to Vung Tau with my brother to visited visitmy grandmother. I had a wonderful vacation there. But I met a complex evert when I went to bỏ to thay bằng on beach. I could not swim. I was curiais about sea water. I wanted to swim. Swimming in the sea was very glad. I was very interesting. But I was unlucky, I didn’t take notice of high tide. The high tide took me away from seaside. I tried to strived strive. I thought I would be drowned at bỏthay in the sea, Everyone shouted. Luckily a man helped me escape from the death. I was safe . That day was very awful


hí hí ḿnh sửa giùm bạn đóa nếu có sai sót ǵ mong mọi người bổ sung nha! nhưng theo ḿnh đóa th́ bài viết của bạn cũn được nhưng muk từ ngữ và mẫu câu ko phong phú bạn nên cho nh́u cấu trúc câu bạn học đc vào th́ bài topic sẽ hay hơn.

ginny_potter
30-04-2010, 12:32 AM
cậu viết sao c̣n phải nhờ dịch là sao tớ không hiểu?
cái tiêu đề topic đọc nghe hok hĩu nổi lun naz
nếu nhờ dịch th́ phải cop ở đâu đó, nhưng cop ùi c̣n nhờ sửa lỗi sai
mâu thuẫn :(

doan_minh94
21-10-2010, 01:14 AM
Last summer, I went to Vung Tau with my brother to visited my grandmother.
I had a wonderful vacation there. (đọc tới ḍng cuối: "That day was awful" => mâu thuẫn => ko thể nào wonderful vacation)
But I met a complex evert ( đúng chính tả th́ là 'event' nhưng ko ai lại nói 'tôi gặp 1 sự kiện phức tạp' cả, nên đổi thành 'I was in a harsh situation') when I went to the beach.
I was curiais about sea water. ( anh đang muốn bơi chứ ko phải anh đang muốn bik trong nước biển có ǵ, bỏ câu này đi)
I could not swim but I wanted to. ( gom 2 câu lại thành 1)
Swimming in the sea was very glad. ( anh chưa bơi sao anh bik glad, nên sửa thành "Swimming in the sea must be glad")
I was very interesting. (interested/excited)
But I was unlucky, I didn’t take notice of a high tide.( chia thành 2 câu riêng biệt hoặc ngăn cách bằng ";")
The high tide took me away from the seaside.
I tried to strived . ("tôi cố gắng chống chọi"... với cái gi`?, not very clear , sửa thành 'I tried to survive')
I thought I would be drowned (drown là active, ko dùng passive) at sea.
Everyone shouted. Luckily a man helped me escape from the death. I was safe . That day was very awful
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