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Nguyễn Hồng Hạnh
05-12-2006, 10:54 AM
I write a paragraph about the topic: "Plastic bags in our country"

Plastic bags are very bad for environment and take 20 to 1,000 years to decompose. But nowaday, plastic bags are used at everywhere in VietNam. Almost Vietnammese people use plastic bags on their everyday life.
So, What must we do?
To answer this question, We can learn experiense of Zanzibar.Do you know the Zanzibar?
Zanzibar is the name of the islands off of Tanzania. In Zanzibar, has made it illegal for people to distribute plastic bags. Anyone who sells plastic bag could go to jail or pay 2,000 dolar, or do both. Zanzibar gets alot of money from tuorism, and the officials want to keep the islans clean.

Mnh muốn viết thm nữa, nhưng ko viết đươc. Cc bạn hy sửa gip mnh với. Cm ơn cc bạn nhiều. :D
Cho thn i.

catbuitriam
05-12-2006, 01:20 PM
Plastic bags are very bad for environment and take 20 to 1,000 years to decompose( to be decomposed). But nowaday, plastic bags are used at everywhere in VietNam. Almost Vietnammese people use plastic bags on their everyday life.
So, What must we do?
To answer this question, We can learn experiense of Zanzibar.Do you know the Zanzibar?
Zanzibar is the name of the islands off of Tanzania. In Zanzibar, has made it illegal for people to distribute plastic bags. Anyone who sells plastic bag could go ( could be sent)to jail or pay 2,000 dolar, or do ( does) both. Zanzibar gets alot of money from tuorism, and the officials want to keep the islans clean.

heohong
06-12-2006, 08:27 AM
Plastic bags are very bad for environment and take 20 to 1,000 years to decompose( to be decomposed). But nowaday, plastic bags are used (at) everywhere in VietNam. Almost all/ every Vietnamese people use plastic bags on their everyday life.
So, What must we do?
To answer this question, We can learn experiense of Zanzibar. Do you know the Zanzibar?
Zanzibar is the name of the islands off of Tanzania. In Zanzibar, (it has been made illegal for...) has made it illegal for people to distribute plastic bags. Anyone who sells plastic bags could go ( could be sent)to jail or pay 2,000 dollars, or do ( does) both. Zanzibar gets alot of money from tourism, and the officials want to keep the islands clean.the island is kept clean is better

forgetmenot
06-12-2006, 09:14 AM
* nowaday >> nowadays
* on their everyday life>> in their daily lives
* What must we do>> What should we do?
* experiense >> experience
* Zanzibar l 1 hn đảo hay quầng đảo vậy?? sao island lc số nhiều lc số t??

Alo_Picasso
06-12-2006, 08:23 PM
Chài ! Không hiểu NHH muốn sửa gì nữa nhưng mà nếu tôi là giáo viên thì bài này chỉ được 3-4 điểm với thang điểm 10 với lí do :
1/Về Nội dung : Write a para. about " Plastic bags in our country" thế mà trong bài của bạn chỉ được 3 câu đầu nói về "plastic bags " còn thì chẳng " support " cho topic sentence tí nào.
2/Trong bài viết của bạn có một số lỗi mà các bạn khác đã sửa ( mình không cần phải sữa nữa ) tuy nhiên lỗi này không nghiêm trọng bằng lỗi 1.
Có thể hôm sau mình sẽ post 1 para. với topic sentence như của bạn- Xin hẹn hôm sau vì mình hiện tại chưa thể nghĩ ra 1 số ý để "support " cho " topic sentence " đó. Xin đê về suy nghĩ thêm.

forgetmenot
07-12-2006, 09:40 AM
Alo Picasso ny kh tnh w ta! Ng` ta mới tập viết m bạn!! hi hi!!

NguyenHongHanh, cố ln em nh!! Từ từ viết sẽ tốt hơn!

Alo_Picasso
08-12-2006, 11:56 AM
Alo Picasso ny kh tnh w ta! Ng` ta mới tập viết m bạn!! hi hi!!

NguyenHongHanh, cố ln em nh!! Từ từ viết sẽ tốt hơn!
Uhm ! c lẽ mnh cũng hơi kh tnh 1 t( tại hơi km trong khoản sử dụng từ ngữ diễn đạt ). Sry nha. Nhưng mnh thật sự nghĩ nn ni cho NHH biết l bạn ấy sai ở chỗ no để cn biết m sửa nữa chứ !

miumiu
17-12-2006, 10:39 AM
Mình lại nghĩ khác AloPicaso đấy:
thực ra bài của NHH có cái supporrting idea rất hay và thuyết phục( cái rất cần khi viết ) chỉ có điều đặt chưa đúng chỗ. Đáng ra nên đặt nó ở phần giải quyết vấn đề sau khi đã trình bày những đặc điểm của " plátic bág". Bởi vì topic là về ""Plastic bags in our country" nên phần đặc điểm cần dài hơn nữa.

miumiu
17-12-2006, 12:09 PM
In our modern society, so many products have been born in order to apply the rapid and convenient requests of every people. Among them are the plastic bags, which have become so familiar with us for a long time.
More than the familiarity, plastic bags play an important part in Vietnamese’s life because they appear every time, every where, and for every human acts. Those bags are used to hold foods, some tools and many other things in houses, offices. Going to the market, you need plastic bags to transport things back home conveniently. Because the features of plastic bags are light, small, low-price, and easy-to-use, nearly all of the Vietnamese people considerer them as the most needed things. In fact, there is nothing more effective and economical than this kind of bags while Vietnam is still a developing country. Plastic bags are abundant in sizes and color, useful for every purpose not only in Vietnam but also in so many other countries.
Everything has two sides; we can neither deny the positive points of plastic bags as above nor their negative points. Plastic bags are produced fast and in a large mount of quantity but in order to be decomposed, they need about 20 to 100 years. It is so terrible. We can be inferred that our country will become a huge pile of plastic bag rubbish, which surely will spoil our environment heavily. Moreover, it’s not always good to keep eatable things in plastic bags because this can cause to realize many poisonous substances. Everything over-used is bad, so are plastic bags.
Although plastic bags are essential for human daily action, it’s time we limited using popularly these kinds of bags. However, what can substitute them? This is really difficult to have a suitable answer, especially our Vietnam.

this is my composition with some suggested ideas. I'm sure that it's completly not good but maybe it helps to inspire somtning in your mind.
I also hope that all of you classmates will help me check it or give some other ideas. thank you.