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phucthien1992
14-10-2008, 11:59 PM
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hokcoten
15-10-2008, 04:39 PM
Ok, bi ny th bạn nn viết lại th hơn. Lỗi ngữ php rất nhiều.
Nếu bạn muốn cả thiện kĩ năng viết th ra hiệu sch mua quyển How to prepare for the TOEFL essay của Barron's về đọc (hnh như l 30k hay 33k g đ). Sch đ hướng dẫn chi tiết cch lm 1 bi essay, từ khi tập viết cu, đến viết đoạn rồi ghp cc đoạn lại thnh bi.
Gud luck ;)

n0ov-GoD
14-01-2010, 01:19 PM
Nn dng thm những từ xếp vo loại highly-structured lexis, v grammar nữa

Bienngoc
14-01-2010, 04:00 PM
ban nen tra tu dien collocation de su dung tu, cum tu cho chuan. Vi du: Theo minh biet, Dong tu "sense" ko di kem voi tinh tu, theo sau no la 1 trang tu or danh tu.
Ban cung nen chu y den cach dung dau cau. Vi du: ko dc dung ", however," ma đun: "; however,"
Ban cung nen chu y cach dien dat. Cau " for example,......designer" co y nghia ko ro rang.
Ban va minh cung luyen viet n. Chuc ban thanh cong! :D

Van_An_AoF
14-01-2010, 04:40 PM
Mnh mới chập chững viết essay cho toefl h ! bi mnh viết chổ no chưa được cc ban sửa dm mnh nha ! với lại mnh viết essay cn lu w( cỡ 1 tiếng ) c ai c cch improve tnh trạng ny 0? thanks nhu nha !^^:04:
People work because they need money to live . What are some other reasons that people work ? Discuss one or more of these reasons . Use specific examples and details to support your answer .

I am working for a design fashion company . Surely , money is not a main reason to hold me down in my job . Therefore , i believe that enjoyment , loving in occupation and contributing for their society are important factors that people workmnh nghĩ chỗ n nn sửa l that cause people \/\/ork

People work in an enjoyment . Can you stay alone at home all day without feeling sorrow ? . Your answer , of course is not . Working makes people sense more excited because they can make friend with so many people , make widely relationship on their own such as inviting their colleague to go shopping or going coffee shop and so on .

Loving in occupation , i think its a main reason of working . For example , an engineer works with a very high salary per a month , however , he likes to become a designer . This thing makes his works productivity is reduced , moreover he feels unhappy , sooner or later ,he quits . c per th bỏ a chứ nhi?

When working , people have been contributing more and less for society day by day . So many people are working for this reason . May be they think that , if they work theirs best for country , society develops , facilities develop and their life develops , too . Or , people want to help for their community in order that improving everyones lifes without thinking about personal benefits . mnh nghĩ l \/\/orking due to this reason th ha`/ hơn.Số nhiều của life l li\/es.

Working makes money and money makes all of us are happy , but if everyone thinks so , there will be no more any reasons to working . Enjoyment , loving in occupation and contributing for their society are the reasons people work for possible life .
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casablanca_thuytrang
15-01-2010, 09:16 PM
thnh thật m ni th organization của bạn hơi t.Thiếu logic v sự thu ht khi chuyển lm người đọc hơi bị hụt